User:Adamn1626/Online vetting/EnergyMold Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Adamn1626


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adamn1626/Online_vetting?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think your updates are well written for the most part. Just a few simple critiques.

The first paragraph says the word Social Media in every sentence. You can reference it without sounding repetitive.

First sentence of the second paragraph has a grammatical error. Change "Wants" to "Want".

Reread your introduction to the "Legal Position" section. The sentence does not make sense grammatically, and you might not need it at all.

Your sources are good, and the addition to the "Views and Practice" section adds a lot of good information to readers.