User:Addutra/Communication design/Ckilyy Peer Review

General info
Addutra
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Addutra/Communication design
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Communication design

Lead

 * Lead does not add new content, but it does not need to add new content. Lead primarily edited for clarity.
 * Lead includes an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic.
 * Lead briefly touches on each of the article's major sections.
 * Lead does not include information that is not present in the article; all information is relevant to the rest of the article.
 * Lead is concise.

Content

 * Content added is relevant to the topic.
 * Content added is up-to-date.
 * No content that is missing or content that does not belong; all content present and relevant.
 * Article does not include marginalized or historically underrepresented perspectives.
 * Overall content comments:
 * Visual communication design: "accurate alternative terminology to cover all types of design applied in communication. It uses a visual channel for message transmission,"
 * I think the original article was trying to convey that visual communication design is all types of visual design in communication. The way that the sentence is currently phrased implies that visual communication design is synonymous for all communication design, which is inaccurate.

Tone and Balance

 * Content maintains neutral tone.
 * There does not appear to be any bias in this article.
 * No viewpoints overrepresented or underrepresented, appears balanced.
 * Content does not appear to persuade the reader to think in one particular manner towards the subject.

Sources and References

 * Most of the content is backed up by reliable secondary sources of information. Comments on sources:
 * Lead- While the original article has multiple source, the draft version does not retain any of these sources. If the sources were deliberately removed, be sure to add reliable sources throughout.
 * Print Media Design- there appears to be bolded numbers where sources should be included, but these sources are not in fact present.
 * Content accurately reflects what sources say.
 * Sources are thorough.
 * Sources are current.
 * Sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors, but do not include historically marginalized individuals.
 * Links work.

Organization

 * Concision comments
 * Overview- "This impact can be to the bottom line of the commissioning body," this is confusing to someone who has no understanding of what the "bottom line" would be.
 * Grammar/Spelling errors
 * Lead- "media communicates" should be "media communicate," since media is a plural word.
 * Lead- "single, integrated" should be "single integrated"
 * Overview- "strategic business thinking: using" should be "strategic business thinking that uses"
 * Overview- "through a variety of media mediums." should be "through a variety of media"
 * Content is well-organized.

Images and Media

 * No added media to this article.

For New Articles Only

 * Article is not a new article.

Overall impressions
Hi Addutra! Your edits have definitely improved the strength of this article. The article was already pretty complete in terms of its content, but your adding sources substantiated the content of the article. See the comments above for improvements to your article. Overall great work!