User:Addyalaska/Avalanche/Gschultz1980 Peer Review

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This seems like there is a missing piece of context "Thin snowpacks may also increase the frequency of injuries due to trauma, such as a buried skier striking a rock. " like maybe it needs to say a skier becoming buried?

Double check this part as it appears to be incomplete "and depth. and a short-term"

No comma needed here "snow events, and wet avalanche"

I think you could totally add something here to connect the thoughts outside of the parentheses "increase. (More snowfall".

Overall: I think the edits you made are good. I would suggest fleshing out some of your bullet points a little more than they currently are. I think your lead is also good and informative.

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