User:Adeledaniels5/Language deprivation in children with hearing loss/Kristyben Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Adeledaniels5, Jneri01, Lily's pads, Skylar2002


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adeledaniels5/Language_deprivation_in_children_with_hearing_loss?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Language deprivation in children with hearing loss

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: N/A

Content: The content added about Language Acquisition in Deaf children is very relevant to the topic and is just as important when talking about Language deprivation.

Tone and Balance: I believe your article edits are unbiased and simply present the facts as they are stated. You do a good job of not pushing beliefs from either side of an argument.

Sources and References: You have a good number of sources which is really good, I do think if you could find a way to paraphrase the cited quote and then still cite it that would allow the paragraph to flow a bit more. I also saw you added to additional sections and if you planned on editing those, I think finding sources to bolster the claims made in them would be a really good idea.

Overall Impressions: It's a really great addition to this article so far and I'm excited to see how the rest of it turns out!

Thank you for your feedback! We are taking steps to continue presenting unbiased information and not pushing beliefs within the article. We also plan on adding additional sources and will consider paraphrasing the cited quote for a better flow. Overall, we will be focusing on adding additional sources, connecting them to the information already in the article, and making sure the article flows better. Again, we appreciate the feedback!