User:Adesuwai/Mental health inequality/Sam.canaz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Adesuwai


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adesuwai/Mental_health_inequality?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mental health inequality

Evaluate the drafted changes
Paragraph is extremely well written and factual, sounds very professional and formal. The lead is very strong and the topic sentence accurately introduces what will be talked about throughout the rest of the entry. Grammar is strong throughout and the information is very relevant to the topic. I have no real criticisms of the written work as it is concise and well organized. Only thing I would check on is I believe this assignment required 2 paragraphs as per UBlearns, so I would just check on that. Overall, amazing work!