User:Adg21a/Basking in reflected glory/Amandalonsoo Peer Review

Content

Just like the title says " basking in reflected glory," the content within it supports it strongly. When it comes to fantasy Sports, nationalism in games, betting, and the significance of pronoun usage meaning target audience, people tend to fancy some glorious that mostly are not directly related to them. The content also captures the contemporary scenario and viewpoints when it comes to Sports and those that follow it. However, in recent times, sport has become a universal game and even women are getting more involved as compared to back then when men were the only ones considered the main followers of sports. Based on this the article is not much up-to-date since it has not factored in the involvement of women in sports.

The content captures most of the factors leading to reflected glory although some do not seem too much accurate. For instance, betting on professional sports has become popular these days, however, it is not a cause for Glory as the article labels it. Some individuals have managed to make Good Fortune from betting while others have ended up in depression and over time due to losing. Betting is therefore a two-way thing that involves both glory and depression.

The article has touched on the involvement of some groups in sports although it has not addressed it effectively. The dimension of women and involvement in sports seems accurate although in the few recent years, things seem to have changed since more and more women are getting into sports and their game is getting recognised in most places around the world.

Tone and Balance

In general, there is no business within the content and the other us effectively manage to maintain the balance and address issues that affect various groups as far as the topic is concerned. The content at some point explains the view of society on sports as it relates to men and women. The author claims that " women are usually not in the commercial unless they are being sexualized as the ones making food or handing in the beer" and according to the article, " most professional sports organisations just assumed that men at the main target audience because they watch sports the most." these two statements a heavily biased towards the women since the modern world has made some significant steps when it comes to inclusion and involvement of women in sports. Present us at the time of this article the world has witnessed not only women going to cheer their favourite teams along with men but also some top competitions involving them in sports and the world. For instance, less than a year ago The Witness to the Women's World Cup did not only the women but also the men in numbers.

Even though the article has expressed bias towards a particular group, it has not attempted to persuade the reader in favour of any position or away from another. The author may have meant for the reader to believe some things that are based on the order of the opinion they have not tried much to convince the reader to as such beliefs.

Sources and References

The author has attempted to back up the claims using some sources that touch on the topic. The content is only backed up by two sources one of which is a peer-reviewed article while the other one is a blog that also effectively discusses some of the issues related to the topic within this article. However, Wikipedia is usually a free encyclopaedia that provides information to the general public and therefore information within it should be easily available to anyone looking for them. One of the reference sources used for this article is not freely accessible to everyone unless one is subscribed to view it. An individual like me or any other person who does not have any subscription to the Atkins diet isn't limited to viewing the abstract and overview information of the article. Judging from the abstract it seems like an effective source since it largely covers the topic that is being discussed within this article.

The author could have used better sources which are more informative than the one used especially to expand more on the issues that have been mentioned within the article. The sources that have been used are already good for the article although they will be even better especially in adding more information to the Raiders and lending to the article.

Organization

The information in this article is well-written, easy to read and concise, although there are some grammatical mistakes that could have been easily avoided with thorough counter-checking checking the article. For example, the use of " betting cites" instead of "betting sites" refers to the online betting platforms that are common and popular these days. The message in which article is however comprehendible despite these few mistakes. Effectively broken down the various causes of reflected glory with each into its section for more clarification.

Images and Media

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Overall impressions

In general, the article is good I think I'm going to eat to make it even better. More information needs to be added for the reader to understand each of the points listed in the article better the used images, audio files and videos should have been employed to give the reader more information and representation of the various issues raised. This can also be achieved by research and looking more into previous literature work.

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