User:Adg21a/Basking in reflected glory/Dannyx12377 Peer Review

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Overall, the edits and additions have improved the quality and comprehensiveness of the article by providing more real-world examples and expanding on key concepts related to BIRGing. The content added is relevant, up-to-date, and backed by proper references. The tone remains objective and neutral. The writing is clear and concise. The main areas for improvement are fleshing out certain sections, diversifying sources, and refining organization.

Starting with strengths, the fantasy sports and nationalism sections offer interesting modern applications of BIRGing that make the concept more relatable. The fantasy sports example in particular does well to demonstrate how BIRGing manifests differently in that context. The significance of pronoun usage is another insightful addition that concretely illustrates how language is used in BIRGing vs CORFing.

In terms of tone and balance, the content additions avoid bias and persuasion. The writing aims to inform, not convince. Views are presented objectively.

Regarding sources and references, all new content is properly attributed. The sources appear legitimate and current. Referencing could be improved by pulling in more scholarly sources where possible to balance out the news articles and websites used. The sources could also be more diverse in authorship.

In terms of organization, the content flows logically and transitions well between topics. The writing is clear and succinct. I would recommend some minor formatting tweaks to delineate sections more clearly, such as adding an extra line break before the fantasy sports paragraph.

Looking holistically, the additions help paint a fuller picture of BIRGing. If I had to recommend expansions, covering BIRGing on social media could be interesting as celebrity culture and public personas are so prevalent online now. Providing more balance by diving into criticisms and limitations of BIRGing research would also add nuance. Lastly, a deeper look at gender differences studied in BIRGing/CORFing would enrich the coverage.

In summary, the edits strengthen the BIRGing article through relevant examples and analysis that retain an objective perspective. A few minor organizational refinements and diversifying sources would further improve quality. Overall, the additions demonstrate a clear understanding of key concepts and successfully build on existing content.