User:Adi400x/Opitsaht/Ghazarid Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Adi400x)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Adi400x/Opitsaht?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

There were many things that I loved about your draft that I found to make your subject seem much more interesting. First was the structure an organization where everything was balanced and the drat itself covered multiple topics as well with each topic getting the section it needed to be an explanatory section. I also find the addition of pictures to show the home island of the Opitsaht to be a good addition to the draft to prevent the wikipedia from being just one monotone page. In addition, it seems that you have already hyperlinked to other wikipedia pages for certain keywords which is a good as this is work already done to let you focus on cleaning up the draft.

The one thing I believe that can be improved is a greater emphasis on pre-contact history where their history before the Europeans arrived exists. Perhaps by including their origin stories and their legends, this may be a good addition to the draft. Also, on the topic of history, it would be nice to see what the Opitsaht and the greater nation they're a part of now work on in terms of policy and how they run the nation as a government-like organization if there's any.

Thank you for reading this peer review.