User:Adr2018/United Farm Workers/RandomSTAY Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Adr2018


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Adr2018/United_Farm_Workers&veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * United Farm Workers

Evaluate the drafted changes
Starting off, the choice to include community organization for health care really contributes to the article. The examples given illustrate the complexity of the UFW, especially how they went beyond just equality in the workplace; they helped further all aspects of farmworker's lives. I assume that the addition would be placed in or around the "Community organizing and divisions of labor in the UFW" section. A suggestion I have for that section would be to explain what the dwindling resources that caused the decline of UFW sponsored healthcare were. As for the next addition of 1970s, the information on what caused the decline of the UFW is very relevant and important in illustrating why the UFW lost traction. I would place that snippet in between the last two sentences under the "1970s" section. Finally, the Robert Kennedy section looks great, but I would love to see more on the effects his death had on the farmworkers movement: i.e. did they feel discouraged? What came out of that loss of hope? The Robert Kennedy information could fit under the roles section, or it very well could be it's own little section. I think that's really up to you. Something I did notice as I read the original article was the lack of Dolores Huerta information. I would advice you to focus on adding more about her role and importance in the movement. So far though, great job! Although there were some minor spelling errors, the flow and information is fantastic. Your sources seem to be academic journals and books, which are solid sources, and they are pretty new considering that the information is historical figures and events. The information is also presented in a clear and non-biased way. Overall, you're on the right track, just keep expanding on your research!

-Best of luck

RandomSTAY (talk) 18:34, 29 September 2021 (UTC)