User:AdriN070/Yoruba art/AbigailLynnArts Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Group of 4: (AdriN070, Bbaileyarthistory, Cmagada20, Talliejoy)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AdriN070/Yoruba_art?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Yoruba art

Evaluate the drafted changes
Are you adding more to a single section of the Yoruba art article? Or is this a new page entirely about are and life in Yoruba culture?

I think the information you’re adding is good but i’d like to see little more information on some of the topics you put in bullet points in the sandbox draft. Example: “ Oyo also used horses for transportation, which was beneficial to the kingdom.” How did the horses benefit the kingdom. What specifically did they do that impacted the life of the Yoruba? Did the impact of horses in any way impact the art? Another example “ Some of these sculptures become very significant and holy and can only be held by certain people and are often passed down to others as well.” Are there examples of what sorts of people were in line to be given these sculptures or names/titles for the ones capable of holding the sculptures?

I’m also not sure if “holy” is the right word to use in an African context, perhaps “spiritual” or “spiritually powerful” would be better? Right now it just looks like you added onto the previously existing section a little bit, I’m assuming there’s going to be more explanations of these various topics? I’d just like to see more info about what you’re adding, and clarity on if you’re expanding the article or making a completely new page.