User:Adrian.JAC/Neuroconstructivism/Jia0703 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(provide username)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

what is good:

- good grammar correction

- informative content added

- effect of drugs to neurotransmitter

- concussion

- good choice of vocabulary (simple and clear, easy to understand)

- references are reliable and easy to access

what can be improved:

enbrainment:

- concussion: "temporary?" (maybe go deeper - what condition cause temporary brain function loss AND if not, can it be permanent loss and what condition/function)

- be more concise and do not be repetitive

- perhaps name the specific neurotransmitter involved in the drug and state the physiological effect when the neurotransmitter is altered.

- watch for close-paraphrasing (mimic; marijuana and heroin)

others:

- be sure to take out the note once finish editing (extra comment)

- define neuroconstructivism