User:Aejessen/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Fountain pen - Wikipedia

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose to evaluate this article since I have decent baseline understanding of the knowledge that is covered here, and noticed some minor problems and missing information that would be relevant in such an article.

Evaluate the article
To begin, I feel as if the lead section of this article is weak, being wordy and despite covering all of the sections in the article, I think that the lead section would ideally be split into two paragraphs with the first paragraph covering the generic idea of a fountain pen and the second talking more about the anatomy of the fountain pen so that the following sections have a better lead-in instead of all of that information being in a single paragraph.

The other main problem that I found with this article is the fact that it is fairly out of date. I am no expert in the history of early fountain pens but in the last few years there has been a great resurgence of fountain pens made by smaller companies, particularly in Asia which have allowed for cheaper, higher quality pens which are not just status symbols to become more widespread and accessible which I think would be an important point to add to this article to ensure that it is relevant to the current day and moves the content beyond the western-centric viewpoint that the article is written in. That being said, such an edit may require sourcing or translating information about fountain pen sales off of a variety of websites and so is not an easy undertaking.

To cover some other bases, the sources look to be fairly good with many links still working correctly, and the balance of material I think is fair to the importance of the sections that are written out.