User:Aemoe85/State violence/Szelinsky Peer Review

General info
BelchingFox, Skyjay999, Aemoe85
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Aemoe85/State violence
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):State violence

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi all, good work!

I think you are making valuable contributions to the introduction in your draft! I do feel like maybe you could edit to have more neutral language in the last sentence in the introduction, and maybe add differing perspectives if you have those available.

I can see clear intentions to add items that I think will really help round out more of the article content, and there are many ways you could start to expand on it.

Perhaps by the end you may end up needing more resources, but the ones you have now seem of good quality.

It seems like you have good intentions to improving the organization as well.

Good luck! Szelinsky (talk) 04:05, 17 February 2024 (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback!

Thank you for your feedback. You mentioned the last sentence in the draft which has come up from several reviewers. We will definitely fix this portion thank you. Thank you for the words of inspiration. _Skyjay999