User:Afiaetonam/Maria Rodriguez Denton/Jchang35 Peer Review

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Afiaetonam


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 * User:Afiaetonam/Maria Rodriguez Denton


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Regarding the lead of this Wikipedia article, I definitely got the main idea of the article- it told me who Lauren Macuga was and why she is important- she is on the US Alpine Ski Development Team. However, I think I would appreciate a little more context about what the US Alpine Ski Development Team is because I am confused on what that actually means. Does she make skis? Does she ski? The group could also just link to a source that describes what the development team is. I think the lead could also give a more specific overview of what she has accomplished in the lead, so that if I just want a quick overview of what she has done, I could get a quick summary of the later content in the lead section. The sections seem to describe her in a chronological pattern, so I think the lead could say something like "she started out as XYZ, then is now a ABC", so that the readers know what is coming up in the article.

I think the content of the article are very relevant as it focuses on her professional career mostly and the lead did mention her mostly as an athlete. I think the group did a good job in having an unbiased content that just lists facts about her accomplishments and some of her struggles which are also all cited. The sources that they used also seem reasonable as one of them was the official U.S. Ski & Board page and the other was an article written about her. The group clearly highlighted from which resource they got all their information every sentence, so it was really clear to me where some information was found and I could go check it if I wanted to. As the group works on this draft more, I think they could include more sources and expand on some of the other activities that Macuga participated in. I think they could also try to link to separate pages that might exist, maybe for the U.S. Alpine Ski Development Team, Park City Ski & Snowboard FIS women’s team, the Park City Ski & Snowboard Club, or even Chip Knight to increase discoverability. Overall, I think this article was very concise and clear which I really appreciated.