User:Agabler/evaluation

 Article Evaluation 

Article: Pedro Menéndez de Avilés
 * Overall, the article is rather focused and concise, and flows pretty well; there are not any bad grammatical errors, nor are there any significant digressions
 * The structure of the article gets confusing near the end; the article would probably be better if the "Family" section was moved to the beginning, and given a new title, such as "Early Years"
 * Most of the info is not even about his family in the section, so if the section is not moved, then a lot of the info could still be worked into previous sections
 * One area that is an issue is the discussion of the assault on Fort Caroline on St. John's River, and it seems that two separate authors each wrote their own section on the event. They provide very different numbers on the number of Frenchmen and the number of casualties involved, differences that arise from the use of different sources (also, it is worth noting that the sources were published 200 years apart).
 * The article would be greatly improved if these two sections were simply combined into one, with the best source used to address the discrepancies
 * There is also a separate Wikipedia article that discusses this event, so linking to this article and leaving out a lot of the details could potentially clean up the article substantially
 * There is a link to "King Carlos" that does not lead to a page (i.e. red link)
 * Every anecdote/fact/detail has a citation, and these citations all seem to be backed up by their respective sources
 * The sources lead to the correct places
 * The article has a comprehensive list of sources that is very diverse, including journals, books, and web sources and ranging from the 16th to 21st centuries
 * The article is interesting because it discusses a figure that Fernandez-Armesto writes about in his book. He writes as if he is constructing a narrative and uses often fanciful language, intricate descriptions, and myths and quotes to enhance his story. The article does away with all of these elements, providing a straightforward, factual, and concise description of Menendez
 * The Talk page is rather sparse, and no significant changes seem to have been prompted from the discussion
 * The article does not say much about Santa Elena and says nothing about Menendez tracking down pirates, which based on Fernandez-Armesto's book seem to be two important aspects in Menendez's story that could be expanded upon in the article