User:Agreeves/Genetics of post-traumatic stress disorder/Aebner01 Peer Review

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Within the sandbox, there is an addition pertaining to the phenotypes of different mental illnesses and how they relate. As the instructor noted, I believe there was a mistake when comprehending what the source was stating. For example, I do not believe she meant that height is a mental illness in which shares a similar phenotype as PTSD. Additionally, the information added was lacking in detail. For instance, what are the "thousands of different factors" influencing phenotype. I think the direction she is wanting to head is spot on. By making a more sound connection between the variations among race and gender, readers will have a better understanding over the genetics component relating to the mental illness. There was limited work done within the sandbox so below are some notes on what I would focus on reviewing.

The main thing that stands out to me within the main article is the lack of organization. There is a solid lead that feeds into the information provided throughout the entire article, so I do not think much work needs to be done here unless there is any new subtopics added. Within the body of the article, the first subtopic is huge and lacks organization. Here, I would go through and add 2-3 subheading to break up the information. For example, I would add a subheading relating to SNPs since this is a large component of genetics and there is a lot of information on them within the potential influences subheading. I would also consider separating research from the other influences to create a better breakdown of information as well. Moving on to the rest of the article, I would suggest that there is a new section created acknowledging the nature vs nurture aspect of genetics. There is a lot of research over this concept and I think it would be a great addition to the information already provided within the rest of the article.