User:Aguakatee/Lower Kootenay Band/Rdelunal Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Aguakatee


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aguakatee/Lower_Kootenay_Band?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

Good intro. I think it provides enough information to get the reader interested

Geography:

You already stated that the Katunaxa Nation is near the Kootenay river which might sound repetitive when you state that the river is incorporated in the Yaquan geography. Also that statement (second sentence) is a bit unclear.

Sentence 5 and 6 I would revise for grammar

Sentence 6 is incomplete or should be reworded to simply say that they were very protective people.

This section also provided good information. I would just look back and make sure your sentences are complete and they flow well.

Government:

Section is also good. I would also go back and check some of the sentences for minor errors. The last sentence mentions that the nation was recognized in British Columbia then you go on to say that it means they are in the fifth stage of negotiations? I don’t know what you are trying to say with that I would explain what the negotiations you are talking about.

Culture:

Lots of information, good job. There are minor sentence structure errors so I would suggest copying into word and checking grammar.

Nice job overall I think you are definitely in the right direction. The article provides well rounded information. Check the sentences for minor structure problems but other than that I think it looks great.