User:Ahmajorette/Ku Ponung/Poppyprint Peer Review

'''Hmm...I see on your talk page that you added a lead, but I can't see it! Did you forget to publish?'''

'''You have done a fantastic job, especially for a new article! Your hard work really shows. I have made some copyedits (you can see that you need to pay more careful attention to typos and using uppercase, for example) and other suggestions. In terms of content, again great job for a first, brand-new article, but I was wondering if we could have more information on Ku's artistic style. It's clearly indicated that he was resistant to the academic style preferred in the government-sponsored Joseon Art Exhibition, but what was it like? I think you have enough in the current sources to expand these.'''

Unfortunately, the image rights are owned by MMCA (National Museum of Modern and Contemporary Art) :(

Ku Ponung was a Korean modernist painter (removed comma) associated with Fauvism (link). (<- this sentence does not belong in "early life") He (take out the first sentence, change he to Ku Bonung) was born in 1903 (where?) to a wealthy family. He attended Gyeongsin (fixed typo) High School and Goryeo Art School (where are these schools?). Here (where...??) he studies (studied -> past tense) under Ko Hui Dong, the first Korean W(uppercase)estern style oil painter, and Na Hye-Sok (Na could also use some brief information - and don't forget to link both). He then moved to Japan to continue his education in the Art Department of Nihon U(uppercase)niversity and the Pacific Art S(uppercase)chool (where are these schools located in Japan?). Nihon University had a less strictly academic approach to art education than other institutions. it provided a broader liberal arts education and attracted a more stylistically and ideologically diverse student body.

After completing his studies in Japan, Ku Ponung moved back to Korea (when?). He was part of an emerging social scene of artists dissatisfied with the strict academic style mandated by the Joseon Art Exhibition (unfortunately no link...but you could provide brief info about the Joseon Art Exhibition here, at least that it was sponsored by the Japanese government). The forum for this (new? emergent?) culture were the coffee houses in Seoul (you could even specify the area where the coffee shops were located), which sought to emulate Parisian coffee houses and salons. These establishments played western Jazz and classical music and hosted art exhibitions. They were a central meeting place for artists are writers to exchange ideas and support each other's work. (<-added period)

Return to Korea (hmm, not sure if this is the best title, since you already discussed his return above?)
Ku Ponung's (added apostrophe) first exhibited works were part of a larger exhibition in a coffeehouse in 1931 (do we know which? and exhibition title? Who the other participants were?). His first solo exhibition took place in June of 1931 in the Dong A Ilbo newspaper building in Seoul. It contained 50 works completed in Tokyo (uppercase). There was minimal reaction to this exhibition, except from critic Kim Yoong Jun who claimed that society was too "immature" to appreciate Ku's work (seems to need citation here?). His second solo exhibition took place in the coffee house Bon Ami in 1933. By this time he was involved with an association of artists called Mogile. Their work was described as dangerous, unstable, and decadent.

His most well known work is entitled Portrait of a Friend, it is a portrait of his close friend and classmate, the poet and writer Yi Sang (make sure to link his Wiki page!). Grammatical error: run-on sentence. Separate or delete "it is." This is a common error that appears across many students' writings! See:

https://www.grammarly.com/blog/run-on-sentence-basics/

Ku's work incorporated the visual language of Matisse, Cézanne, analytic cubism, and expressionism, while exploring ideas like the modern girl (may need more explanation here - especially since "modern girl" in the Korean context does not have a Wiki page) and various aspects of Korean identity. '''He is quoted as having said "I spent my entire artistic career in a net of Japanese influence… I even had to ask what Korean influence meant."  (I remember this quote! But wasn't this after Korea's liberation? Should specify)'''

Ku Pung had a publishing house called Changmunsa (창문사 - fixed typo. When? 1923). He worked with the Ministry of Education of the United states Army Military Government in Korea and created one of the first art books for school children as part of his association with it. (OK, so this seems to be a much later part of his life well after liberation - you should specify that. It's especially confusing to have this sentence right after Changmunsa, which was established in 1923, and it's difficult to understand how these two are connected...you could perhaps more explicitly say that he was also actively involved in literary publication or something similar)

Legacy and Death
Ku Ponung died in 1953 during the Korean War. Most of his paintings were lost or destroyed.

'''*Hmm...more on "legacy" because the content doesn't really include legacy...? Or simply title the section Death if you don't have more to add.'''

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