User:Ahuang01/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
(Provide a link to the article here.) Endometriosis and infertility

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
(Briefly explain why you chose it, why it matters, and what your preliminary impression of it was.) UCSF Wikipedia article assignment; matters because there is not a lot of information on the current wikipedia page. Those who suffer from endometriosis may want to know more about the impact of their disease on their fertility status and make life decisions based on the information given.

Evaluate the article
(Compose a detailed evaluation of the article here, considering each of the key aspects listed above. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what a useful Wikipedia article evaluation looks like.)

Lead section

Not much information; just a statistic on % chance for infertility in those with endometriosis. There is no description of endometriosis nor does it really address what the Wikipedia article addresses.

Content

Content seems basic and brief. It summarizes potential mechanisms without going into them and also the known treatments. Not all of the sections are discusses equally.

Tone and Balance

Doesn't seem to lean in any direction, but the article has an extensive section on IVF that overshadows most of the rest of the article

Sources and References

The sources appear out of date, and doesn't include a lot of review sources (more individual experiments/primary sources).

Organization and Writing Quality

Overall poor writing quality. Writing does not appear concise nor easy to read. The entire article requires various revisions to correct grammar and wording to enhance writing quality.

There is also a random link to correlation does not equal causation on the article that does not seem to belong.

For what it is now, the organization appears fine. There is the potential mechanisms section and current treatments/options that patients opt for; however, only the IVF portion of management is talked about in detail whereas other management options are glanced over.

Images and Media

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Talk Page Discussion

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Overall Impressions

The article needs work in: updating the article with research that is more uptodate, improving the overall writing in the article to become more clear + concise + professional and also added some images/media to the article to depict important points of the topic.