User:Aidan1704/Broughton Archipelago Provincial Park/Mango14406 Peer Review

General info
Aidan1704
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Aidan1704/Broughton Archipelago Provincial Park
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Broughton Archipelago Provincial Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
Strengths:

The lead of the article has been updated with additional content that includes an introduction that clearly describes the article’s topic. Moreover, the lead included information that is relevant but not overly detailed, which provides a strong introduction to Broughton Archipelago Provincial Park.

The article content addresses at least five of the following topics: species that can be found in this area, historical use, Indigenous presence, impacts of climate change, and visitor access. The article content is written in a neutral tone that does not show any biases or unnecessary information. Also, the article is well organized and easy to understand, which enhances the flow. Each section addresses the most important aspects of the topic with strong logical facts that contribute to and relate well to the article. Another strong point of this article is their inclusion of Indigenous presence and the backstory of what happened to them. This gave a greater understanding of the issues surrounding salmon stocks, which led to the implementation of a Letter of Understanding (LOU).

Weakness:

I noticed in some of the paragraphs there are sources missing. For example, in the first paragraph of the history section and in the noise pollution section. Including sources for the information could increase the article's credibility. There are also some grammar and sourcing mistakes in the ecology paragraph, which needs to be reviewed again. For instance, the word "many" and some of the species are capitalized in the second sentence of the ecology section, while others are not. When listing species, they do not need to be capitalized, and it is also best to stay consistent. Also, some of the citations in the ecology section should be placed at the end of the sentences rather than in the middle.

What I learned:

The key takeaway of the article is that Broughton Archipelago Provincial Park is the largest marine provincial park in BC, with a variety of wildlife, Indigenous presence, and recreational opportunities. Additionally, the three main factors contributing to the protection of the park were preserving the ecosystem, providing recreational areas, and preserving the cultural heritage of the area.

Overall impressions:

Overall, the article's content has improved compared to the previous version, as there is now more detailed information about Broughton Archipelago Provincial Park. The lead section and the content addressed are the new article's strong points because there are no biases or unnecessary information present. The article is very knowledgeable and has a clear flow, although some sections need to be cited and grammatically reviewed again.