User:Aidanmjordan/Dancing plague of 1518/Dan18769 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Aidanmjordan et al.


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aidanmjordan/Dancing_plague_of_1518?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dancing plague of 1518

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

No change was made to the article lead, no change is necessarily necessary, however, as the lead conveys the required information if one is willing to use hyperlinks. As a text comparison will show, no changes have been made to anything other than the "events" section of the article. In that section, information already present in the rest of the article is repeated while omitting necessary qualifications. The only original additions are a verbose section on the physician response and a narrative-like account that is descriptive if poorly placed. Neither of these changes have any citations attached to them. These changes modestly expand on the information presented in the article. Some suggestions to improve the article are to track down sources for the [citation needed] sections and to fill out the article lead so readers don't have to click on the hyperlinks.