User:Aidanmjordan/Dancing plague of 1518/Ryan0708 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Aidanmjordan)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aidanmjordan/Dancing_plague_of_1518?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Dancing plague of 1518

Evaluate the drafted changes
The first thing that I noticed was your references and you only attached the website but you need to provide the citation in the proper format. All you need to do is click the cite button in the sandbox draft and input the information it requests. I also think you might want to work on the events section to provide the reader with a clear timeline of what occurred. Also one thing I noticed was when you write "It lasted for such a long time that it even attracted the attention of the Strasbourg magistrate and bishop, and some number of doctors ultimately intervened, putting the afflicted" it got flagged in my computer as plagiarism so you may want to make sure you cite the works you pull from or rewrite these lines. I'm looking at your other sections and it looks very similar to the posted wiki article; did you copy the established article and edit their work or did you develop new material for the article?