User:Aierz/Chinese ideals of female beauty/Anna.gking Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aierz/Chinese_ideals_of_female_beauty?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
- Some sentences are not worded professionally or in right tense. Ex: "It will take time for people to realize Foot-binding was a harmful action since it was common sense."- "eyes" "skintone" "hair" could be subsections

- This is a good journal introduce women's beauty in Chinese traditional culture. Omit, a reader of the article can look for it in citations but article doesn't need to tell them if it is good or not. Not relevant, it is distracting.

- Cultural Ideas section is not neutral and argumentative without proper evidence.