User:Aierz/Chinese ideals of female beauty/Breadrhix Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing

Areiz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Aierz/Chinese_ideals_of_female_beauty?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Chinese ideals of female beauty

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead

Lead is the background to this point about the historical origins of the Chinese female aesthetic. And I think it is very important that all the women in Chinese history are portrayed by men. I think we can focus on this part of the portrayal.The article can write about how the image of women changed as the dynasties changed

Content

This page has a lot of small sections with details describing the hair, eyes, and other details. When it comes to the topic of women's beauty, society's behavior and character of a woman can also be considered.

Tone and Balance

In the last paragraph of the second section Cultural ideas on women's beauty, I think there are some sentences that might indicate a criticism of writing skills. Perhaps it could be paraphrased to make the essay seem more neutral overall.

Sources and References

The sources cited in the article are from credible sources and span a wide range of time. I also think that the content accurately reflects the content of the sources.Also, there is a great deal of information to support the different points of view.

Organization

I think the organization of the article could have been simpler. This would have made the paragraphs more coherent and made the essay easier to understand. There are Chinese references in the first section, but I think they could probably be removed. Because the translation is provided later, the Chinese version may not be as necessary.