User:Aisnotokay/Communist party of great britain/Sodafloats Peer Review

General info
Aisnotokay
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Communist_Party_of_Great_Britain&diff=1187664859&oldid=1184513692

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi! You picked a fascinating topic. Here are some of my thoughts from reading your work.

I wondered, while reading your contributions, what kind of gay activism the reformers wanted the party to get involved in. If the reformers were not specific with what they meant by gay activism, then keeping it in broad terms works. Alternatively, perhaps a link to another Wikipedia article on the gay activism of the time period could work.

A bit of elaboration on what 'politicisation of homosexuality' in the party means could have been helpful, and in what way this led to discrimination against gays in the party. If that term isn't your own words, then I believe it should be put in quotation marks and attributed.

Overall, I think you struck a good balance and I sense a neutral perspective and tone from your writing.

Sodafloats (talk) 12:09, 1 December 2023 (UTC)