User:Ajaslay/Prenatal stress/Mblucas Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ajaslay (that's who the sandbox is under)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ajaslay/Prenatal_stress?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Prenatal stress

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Good job on what you've got done so far! I like the idea of adding the "impacts on development" section, especially because that ties in perfectly with this course's material.

Here are some edits I would suggest making for grammar in the "introduction":

"In Recent findings, epigenetic is associated with the biological processes involved in prenatal stress and fetal programming." change the "Recent" to "recent" and "epigenetic" to "epigenetics"

Since there is no "introduction" section on wiki pages, will the introduction portion of the sandbox become the lead section of the actual wiki article? The content of the introduction gives a good overview of prenatal stress and would be good for your lead!

Here are some edits I would suggest for the impacts on development section:

"can lead to issues in several different developmental areas, including cognitively, socially and more." change to "can lead to issues in cognitive development, social development, and more"

I would suggest editing for conciseness and and taking out repetitive words.

Consider adding more detail about the ethical implications of studying prenatal stress on human children.