User:Ajaslay/Prenatal stress/Nachpark1 Peer Review

LEAD:

The introduction is detailed for the article. Check the grammatical errors in this area.

Content:

Make sure you do not forget to discuss the topics that are present in the introduction. Cognitive development was discussed but not what mental disorders could possibly occur. Also what are the ranges of the birth weights for high risk pregnancies? What causes stress in a fetus? What are ways the mother can reduce these risk, if she can. What occurs during the different trimesters in a pregnancy?

TONE and BALANCE:

The tone of the article is really good, but there isn't much information. Make sure to describe what events are taking place and why they are taking place. I would go back a read the "Impact on Development" section and describe what the actual impacts are. Give detailed descriptions on child brain development and how the mother impacts this. Describe the different impacts a brain disorder can have not only on the child but also on the mother.

REFERENCES:

References are clear and concise. Do not forget to give credit to a source if their information is used in the article. It would be consider plagiarism and result in a zero for the assignment.

ORGANIZATION:

Make sure your article flows. The information really did not educate me on what actual happens during brain development in a child. If there is something the intro that wasn't discussed in the body paragraphs I would suggest going back and redoing the introduction or redoing the body paragraphs.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Overall the information that is given is ok. It needs work, but with the right information and a correction of flow it will be great. Just add more information based on what the topic is actually about. Give solid information about what happens in each trimester with brain development during pregnancy. Talk about how the mother can affect this disorder or where it came from. if it can be cured or ways it can at least be improved over time.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ajaslay


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ajaslay/Prenatal stress
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Prenatal stress
 * Prenatal stress

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