User:Ajclough09/Positive Deviance Approach/Lizzo2210 Peer Review

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Ajclough09/Positive Deviance Approach


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So far in the article I noticed that there was'nt a lot of information written. There were two quotes presented I did really like the first quote I think it was very consise. I think it would be a good starting point to lead into more details and questions like how your theory comes to be. For the second quote I do believe it is a little long and could possibly be utilized more effectively if it were summarized. Also, for the second quotation I did notice there were no intext citation linked with it. I suggest adding a citation as it is unclear if it came from the citation on the bottom or another article completely. With this I would suggest communicating more with the group and starting with the elaborations, history, contributions, etc. to give more clarity as to what the theory is.