User:Ajmaclaurin/Cubanite/JacquelineB3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ajmaclaurin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ajmaclaurin/Cubanite
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Cubanite

Lead
The existing page on Cubanite was very technical, and was hard to read. In addition to this it doesn't have any sections, just one large blurb. The added content not only added a lead section, but also made the overall article much easier to understand. The added lead is concise and easy to follow. My only suggestion would be to be sure that all sections of the article are briefly mentioned in the lead.

Content
The added content is all relevant to the topic. Most of the information added greatly improved the article, however I did find that the sections "extraterrestrial cubanite" and "synthetic cubanite" were very specific. The information is relevant but my suggestion would to include more sources so the information is not centred on one specific study, or to make the content a little more general.

Tone and Balance
The added content is neutral. The information has no intent of persuasion.

Sources and References
Overall the added content uses a great array of relevant sources. Most of the sources are from scientific journals, making for excellent additions, however one source was from Merriam-Webster dictionary and wasn't a necessary resource.

Organization
I thought the organization of the added content was really good. As I mentioned before, the existing wiki page for cubanite has no sections at all, so the added sections here make for a much more comprehensive article. I think all of the sections are relevant and interesting. I think all of the added content is also very easy to understand, especially compared to the existing page which uses a lot of technical terminology rather than plain sentences.

Talk Page
There isn't anything in the talk page yet.

Suggestions
Overall i think that the added content would greatly improve the wikipedia page. My only suggestions would to be sure to include all of the sections briefly in the lead, and to make sure that in the sections "extraterrestrial cubanite" and "synthetic cubanite", the information is more general, either by adding more references that back this information, or by generalizing it.