User:Ajr1234/Punishment (psychology)/Ctom1999 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ajr1234


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ajr1234/Punishment_%28psychology%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Punishment (psychology)

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * LEAD
 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?- As of now, the lead has not been added to/edited to present the new information found in the draft. Because you intend to add new information to the article discussing Punishment in relation to children with disabilities, I think adding a small summary of this new addition would be a great change for the lead.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? - One direction you could take with editing the Lead is making it more concise. Specifically the last paragraph of the lead has a lot of repetitive syntax. The phrase "Punishment has been used" is a starter in three consecutive sentences, making the overall flow of the section feel tedious. I think varying up the structure of these sentences (while still keeping the information present within them) can increase the overall readability of the Lead.
 * CONTENT
 * Overall, I think you are headed in the right direction with the content. Your additions come from articles that are fairly recent, the information is relevant to the topic, and with the discussion of disabled children, this also covers an equity gap in the current article.
 * TONE AND BALANCE
 * Is the content added neutral - For the most part, the content is neutral. As one comment pointed out though, make sure to be careful when using words like "suffering" when describing information in certain contexts. The connation of words such as these can make the additions appear biased in one direction or another.
 * The claims in the "Punishment for children with disabilities" section is very thorough and comprehensive regarding the findings of research. In order to make sure the article remains neutral, I would suggest searching for information (if there is any) that refutes the some of the claims made regarding the use of punishment techniques with this demographic.
 * SOURCES AND REFERENCES
 * As has been pointed out already, some of the listed sources are primary sources. Because Wikipedia secondary literature, finding more for your additions may be helpful in this regard.
 * I would also be careful using some of the sources listed. I noticed that one citation listed an article published in 2011 and 2015. In searching for more sources, I would suggest looking for more recent information on the subject.
 * One area of the article that could use some additions is the "Importance of continuity and contiguity" section. At present, there is only one claim in the entire segment that has a citation. I think finding more research to back up the statements made here would not only add to the articles credibility, but also get you to the desired count of 5-7 sources.
 * ORGANIZATION
 * The organization of the additions is great so far. One question I have is where you plan to put the "Punishment in relation to children with disabilities" section since it's a completely new addition. Will it be an entire new heading, or will it be a subsection for a different part of the article?