User:Akbugday/Climate change in egypt/Pomegranate444 Peer Review

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Bingus2124 and Glacier Ivy
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Great work on this article, it is well researched! here are my suggestions:

Your lead is concise and touches on most of the content of your article. Perhaps you could add a bit more information about climate change's impact on the land, people, and water security.

Content-wise, the main issues of climate change in Egypt are touch on and your tone is very neutral. Your sources are up to date and well done. In terms of what could be added, perhaps some more information in the impacts on people section could be added about urbanization, displaced peoples, and maybe a bit more on heat illness. Also, it may be helpful to elaborate on transboundary water issues and conflicts between Egypt and the nations it shares water with (for instance the Grand Ethiopian dam). Also there are a few sentences that are in quotations but are not attributed to a source.

I like all of your sections, my one comment is that the agriculture section could possible be moved to the impacts on people sections- perhaps as a stand alone section or under economic impacts. It may also be helpful to move the nile river section under the water scarcity.

Overall great work! Your mitigation and adaptation sections are very well developed. There could be information added to your introduction and your impact on people section. Your sources are up to date and cited throughout. I'm excited to see your final product!