User:Akbugday/Climate change in iraq/Garlic78 Peer Review

General info
Pomegranate444
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AstaSolilja


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Akbugday/Climate change in iraq
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Climate change in Iraq

Lead
"The water resources of these two rivers are also shared with upstream nations. Causing conflicts, mismanagement and decreasing water supplies due to due construction" Combine these two.

Good lead: descriptive, but also concise.

Impacts on the natural environment
Water resources:


 * "According to studies, due to a combination of factors, water flow will decrease in Iraw by 25 to 50%"
 * "Iraq's waterbodies and river basins are uniquely vulnerable to the impacts of Climate Change in the 21st century"

Impacts on people
Please Cite

Who specifically is impacted: women, children, elderly, farmers?

Historical and Political factors
look at link in sources and refs

Could also add US influence

Society and Culture

 * "Notable recent and current activism efforts include- Save Basra campaign against water pollution in 2018, Nature Iraq, Save the Tigris, and the Tishereen Movement. in the 21st century, from Human Rights Watch reports, environmental activists have been abducted, detained and prosecuted."
 * Activism and Controversies could be put under one section.

Mitigation and Adaptation

 * "Adaptation methods look to adjusting and preparing for the impacts of climate change."

Tone and Balance
Good balance: could use some more diverse references

Sources and References
Add citations at the end of the sentence.

More Citing and wiki links

https://www.aljazeera.com/program/people-power/2023/9/20/iraqs-water-wars-part-1

https://www.aljazeera.com/program/people-power/2023/9/27/iraqs-water-wars-part2

Overall Impressions
Some formatting issues

Instead of saying recent, please give a year for future readers.