User:Akbugday/Climate change in iraq/JPMCU Peer Review

General info
Pomegranate444, AstaSolilja
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Climate change in Iraq
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Climate change in Iraq

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The article has a strong introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's purpose. The introduction makes a good overview of the topics that will be covered, and I like the way it puts Iraq’s climate vulnerability into perspective globally. However, I think it could be more concise – maybe there could be a paragraph change there or have the water and emissions paragraphs integrated into other sections of the article.

Content

The content added is very relevant to the topic and up to date as far as I can tell. There may be a citation needed for the “Impacts on People” section. The articles content is extremely thorough and well documented and explained. I also think it addresses topics and populations that are historically underrepresented in mainstream media in the western world.

Tone and Balance

The tone is good with neutral language that appears unbiased. The content doesn’t try to persuade the reader of any perspective in particular, other than the obvious of climate change having negative effects.

Sources and References

There are a variety of sources used, many of which are extremely current and thorough. I think that the sources used are really strong as many of them come from official reports such as the UN and the World Bank while others come from research papers and some from news articles. Having tried a few links, they are fully functional.

Organization

The content added is well-written and easy to read. It has good spelling and grammar for the most part – but there is a sentence towards the end that begins with “As well” which I think could be phrased better. The content is well organised and has relevant sections.

Images and Media

The two maps are visually appealing and well captioned.