User:Akbugday/Climate change in israel/AstaSolilja Peer Review

General info
M.K Jasper and Garlic78
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Climate Change in Israel:

General Thoughts/First Thoughts
Here is my peer review- I will kind of follow the structure given above to elaborate on the text...

Lead
The first paragraph in the lead section is really interesting and important but it might be better to start off with the second paragraph. I have seen, in many other climate change article the details/problems immediately first. That might be a better approach as the first paragraph is what poeple read more than anything else, better to not start with a quote.

Content
The content is extremely thorough great job on that. I love the impacts section, as well the greenhouse gas section. The subsection splits are very helpful to lay out the text well. Only other section i would add in a bit more on the societal side of how climate change impacts people now and in the future, adding a section on economic impact, but also what can be done in the future.

Tone and Balance
Great, I really like how each section is fairly balanced and even, not making the wiki article to seem like some sections still need to be added to. The tone is neutral and doesnt switch much throughout the whole text.

Sources and References
So many sources!!! Really helps credit the things being said and backs up the claims made. I do see in the sources there are some citation problems highlighted by the wiki. Maybe fix those at some points, looks super minor though.

Organization
Again, I think i touched on things like this above, maybe the international cooperation section can be added to a larger section on society and culture (I added something like this in Climate change in Iraq). Otherwise organization is on point, I think the point of view works well and writing is consistent. Maybe try to look through the piece and find certain repeating words that can be replaced by other similar words, to make it more vocabulary rich. See the impacts section and change (major to significant) (serious to profound) for example. This is very knit picky but it could help!

Images and Media
Add more maps!!! This is the only section that is lacking, through data driven images. Could be super helpful to add more. Shoot me a text or something, because i figured out a bunch of code to make cool graphics. When you add them in, pay attention to the layout. Maybe move things around.

Overall impressions
So so good guys, you did amazing! I learned so much reading text! Strengths are the writing, data, length and citations. Wonderful!