User:Akbugday/Climate change in israel/JPMCU Peer Review

General info
M.K. Jasper, Garlic78
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:Climate change in Israel
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Climate change in Israel

Evaluate the drafted changes
There is a strong introductory sentence to the article, though I feel the following sentence is quite abrupt and there could do with being a transitional section or that the comments on temperatures and precipitation could come at the end of the introduction. That information is also not expanded on in the rest of the article. I think this lead is well detailed and nicely concise overall.

The content added is relevant and detailed and addresses the different regions of Israel. There is a good amount of statistics throughout the article. It also addresses topics related to historically underrepresented populations.

It also has a neutral tone and does not appear biased unto any particular viewpoint.

There is an extensive amount and range of sources used for this article, some of which are quite old but others that are much more current which I think is again a testament to the variety of sources used. All of the content added also appears to be very well cited. However, there are some links that have been pasted into the article in full which is strange. The links I have tried are fully functional.

I think that the content is very well written and broken into sections that reflect the main points being made in the article. I also think it is very well organised apart from the aforementioned part of the introduction. I have not found any grammatical or spelling errors that stand out.