User:Akbugday/Climate change in israel/Mathilde000 Peer Review

I believe that Fossil Fuels and Industrial Emissions could be grouped together within the Industrial Consumption Subsection unless there's substantial information for each independently. I don’t consider the Deforestation subsection necessary. Israel doesn’t have extensive forested areas, so I don’t believe deforestation significantly contributes to GHG emissions.

The subsections discussing Impacts on the natural environment seem well-developed. I suggest focusing more on the initial part of the page and on the section about 'impacts on people.'

Consider merging Mitigation & Adaptation and including Israel's ratification date of the Kyoto Protocol under that section.

While the History & Context section is well-written, I’m not sure if its necessary

Regarding citations 7, 8, and 9, is that an error, or are you attempting to cite three sources for one sentence?

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