User:Akbugday/Climate change in morocco/M.K. Jasper Peer Review

General info
Akbugday/Climate change in morocco
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Akbugday/Climate change in morocco
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Climate change in Morocco

Evaluate the drafted changes
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 * The lead for this article is good in that it touched on all of the parts of the article. However, I think it could use a sentence introducing renewable energy.
 * The GHG section talks about Morocco’s per capita and overall emissions. What do their emissions look like in comparison to the rest of the world? Are the climate change related disasters the fault of their own or larger emitters around the globe?
 * One of the sub titles is “temperature and weather changes” but the article never talks about temperature. When this section is added it should be connected to the image.
 * Maybe connect water resources to water availability in terms of the people or sectors such as agriculture. Overall, what are the implications of water scarcity?
 * Explain how the lagoons protect the coastline. Is it an issue of salinity?
 * Add an introductory sentence to each sub paragraph for ecosystems that explains how it connects to the temperature and weather changes section above.
 * Specify where Morocco’s priorities for mitigation come from. The source says its an action plan so maybe specify this instead of just saying Morocco.
 * I think Morocco’s lack of independent energy is really interesting. It is explained well in the article.
 * Overall, some of the phrasing at parts of the article feels a little bit awkward.