User:Akbugday/Climate change in morocco/Moonsnail37 Peer Review

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I overall thought this was a good article. I liked how there were pictures and figures to represent areas of Morocco. Even though all of your information was there, I couldn't really follow it as it was a bit scattered throughout the sections. It was a bit difficult to follow, but a more synthesized approach may be more engaging. For example, creating a timeline or a story in each of your sections. Some of the bibliography and citations were all over the place but I think you guys probably have that figured out. I would also suggest fixing up your first sentence. It seems a bit redundant. Overall, it was pretty good.