User:Akeiah/Childbirth-related post-traumatic stress disorder/Mrwil8 Peer Review

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(Akeiah - Childbirth related PTSD)
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 * User:Akeiah/Childbirth-related post-traumatic stress disorder
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 * Childbirth-related post-traumatic stress disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: For your lead in your draft, it's very well constructed and gets straight to the point which is perfect for the leading portions for a Wikipedia article! Something that the reader can read one or two sentences of and get the general idea! My critique and suggestion here is perhaps go into a little bit more detail! What are the specifics of what may cause these psychological disorders after the childbirth? What is a common example of what may define Childbirth related PTSD?

Body: I see you are using the sandbox and drafting your own notes and ideas and your personal interests in the topic which is great! I even share a few questions you asked and what piqued your interest! I think you have a strong build up in the section whereas you explain how childbirth is often viewed as a positive experience, yet there are many cases of childbirth being a traumatic event, whether the delivery experience is a difficult one, or certain actions of the delivery process may trigger unwanted memories, and the effects of this difficult childbirth. This describes the neutral viewpoint of childbirth I believe, by acknowledging that not all childbirth is a positive memory. Keep up the great work! I can see the vision and the structure you're building, you have things pretty well organized, and you're doing wonderful with the building processes!