User:Akmohsenin/Gothic fashion/Johnwinston96 Peer Review

Hi John--This is Dr. Campbell. Here are the questions and considerations you can use to guide your review of Akmohsenin's article.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Akmohsenin


 * Link to draft you're reviewing :User:Akmohsenin
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Goth subculture

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?- So far, I've seen little updates. Continue building your paragraph with more examples on how different gothic styles are used and worn.
 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?- The paragraphs could be longer and more detailed. I suggest adding some more examples so that I can fully know the gothic culture.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?- They do but there only a couple. Add more link sources to your draft.
 * Is the content added up-to-date?- Yes, these are articles from 1997-2019. Try keeping your sources from this time period. The 1980's are fine too if you can some from that decade since the gothic styles really picked up steam according to your article link.
 * How can the content added be improved?- Add more sources to your to article and talk more in depth about the gothic culture. I really want to get more of your insight about this because I didn't really pay attention to gothic styles until I got to middle and high school. I never wanted to adopt to this style of course because it would seem really WEIRD to me! But try adding more sources and if you can, add some more videos and pictures and this would be a top-notch improvement on your article.