User:Akornowski/Nelly Hanna/Buzzancam1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Akornowski


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Akornowski/Nelly Hanna
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * A lead has not been added. The lead could be a brief statement on what your article is about. For example, Why is Nelly Hanna important? Why should we learn about her?

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * The content is relevant to the topic.
 * I do not believe you need a header titled "Article Draft"
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Most of the content is up-to-date. Under the header "Career" there is a fragment of a sentence ("Hanna gained her") that I am assuming is an unfinished thought.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * I would suggest a section of either Hanna's importance or impact on society.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * The content added is mostly neutral. For the sentence, "This book also sets itself apart due to its focus on middle-class Egyptian culture. Most historical Egyptian publications focus on the elites of society. This outlook is a huge discrepancy from traditional publications focusing on higher social classes" if this is taken from a source be sure to cite it. If this is your own opinion then I think you need to have evidence to back it up.

Sources and References


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * The content is backed up by a reliable secondary source.
 * Are the sources current?
 * The sources are current from 1998-2018.

Organization


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * So far, the content added is clear and easy to read.


 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * The content added is well organized. The only suggestion I have would be under the publications section. I think having each publication as its own sub heading might break it down and make it easier to read.

Overall impressions


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?/How can the content added be improved?
 * I think adding more information to your headings will improve the overall quality of the article. For example, you could also add a section for Hanna's lifestyle. How was her home life? Did she have a family? What is she doing now?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * This article has strong sources.

Additional Questions


 * I would add an image of Nelly Hanna and her publications.

~Megan