User:Alanabrent/Disclosure: Trans Lives on Screen/Carrotplushie Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alanabrent's Disclosure: Trans Lives on Screen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Disclosure: Trans Lives on Screen


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * The article I'm peer reviewing is an original article (I think), so the link is the same as the one above: Disclosure: Trans Lives on Screen

Lead

 * The lead section wasn't included in the sandbox draft.

Content

 * The content that was added in the sandbox draft is relevant to the topic - it's a revised version of the plot subsection of the original Wikipedia article.
 * It is missing edits on all of the other sections of the article.

Tone and Balance

 * The content that was added into the sandbox draft is neutral and doesn't seem biased whatsoever.

Sources and References

 * The new content is just a rewording of the previous content that was already up on the Wikipedia article, so it is already cited within the article (but it's not cited in the sandbox draft).

Organization

 * The information that was added into the sandbox draft is easy to read, but the last two sentences of the edited plot section are basically the same thing - so I would advise taking out the second to the last sentence so that it could flow better.

Images and Media

 * No images - which is fine since it's kind of hard finding pictures that don't violate any copyright laws.