User:Alanakay13/Deaf Gain/Dnh22 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Alanakay13) (Jtruso3)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Deaf Gain


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Deaf Gain currently links straight to Deaf Culture.

Evaluate the drafted changes
The last sentence in the lead should be changed. This sentence reads like it is trying to push the reader towards a viewpoint.

The philosophical gains section is very good. Good citations to provide context and also an example.

In the language gains section, bilingualism is very good. I really like the way this is presented in the article, it's smart to highlight bilingualism as a major Deaf gain, especially in a more global context where bilingualism is more respected than just in America.

The gainful employment section is champ. Really awesome historical examples.

For spatial memory, I would like to see maybe like a table of data related to this! It's interesting.

I think the cognitive sections gain is too long without enough citations. My understanding is almost all sentences should be citing something.

Cultural gains transnationalism section is very good. I like the different information presented.

Creative gains section is good. I like the examples. I think there should be some info about De'Via too?

I think more citations are needed. My understanding is almost every sentence should be citing something. Even if all the citations are coming from the same place I think the wiki format is citing frequently (but i'm not totally sure).

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