User:Alanakay13/Deaf Gain/Eaheller13 Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Alanakay13


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 * User:Alanakay13/Deaf Gain


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Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall: I truly like your and James's new concept of article about Deaf Gain. I thought that article explains about our deaf "bing", but I can see that there do have many ways of describing what's Deaf Gain meant for many reasons!

Introduction: It looks great and clearly describes of Deaf Gain in summary.

Philosophical Gains: Very interesting perspective what philosophical gains actually explained in the past. I want to clear up with HEFA controversy, which it occurred at UK. I wonder what about other controversy that impacted to deaf gains in USA, or other countries? I am curious if it is possible to add little bit more in content to explain clearly with these controversy that impact to philosophical gains.

Language Gains: Bilingualism explained it clearly as crystal and easily to refer to another article. However, I am little bit confused why Gainful Employment does includes language gains? I can see that concept of explaining gainful employment including strong evidences. Suggestion: make a new content after Language Gains? I am good with Spatical Memory and Baby Signs. Basic and clear explained.

Cognitive Gains: I truly love how you both presented that concept of cognitive gains and theories. I do have few small concerns because it could become controversy for Wiki especially the first paragraph. We have heard that speech is encouraged, but deaf does have many more gains than speech. Maybe can present with both pros and cons why cognitive gains could impact to deaf people in many ways? Then, can explain what these theories that actually supported deaf gains.

Cultural Gains: I like that you both explained about transnationalism including interact based on cultural gains, and Martha's Vineyard, too. It looks good.

Creative Gains: Looks great. I wonder if you both can explain little bit more about literature like these deaf people who expressed many different ways of literature including folktale, A-Z stories, ASL storytelling, etc.? It isn't only one to focusing on poetry, so it would helpful for an audience to understand better with our creative gains. Also, Deaf Space Project is a perfect example to describe their concept of creative the space project.

All articles informations, pictures, etc. looks good in that article. No issues.

Overall, it is looking great to start for that new article in Wiki! I look forward to see what's your final article looks like soon!