User:Alanakay13/Deaf Gain/Klowe7 Peer Review

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Alanakay13


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 * User:Alanakay13/Deaf Gain


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The article was very extensive and covered a wide variety of subjects within the topic of "Deaf Gain". I appreciated all of the information, but there were a few grammatical errors that disrupted the flow of the text for me. "Spoken language has heavily emphasized on deaf people by hearing professionals" and "and they believe to nurture their language and culture by protecting the future generation of deaf people." are a few examples of the sentences I think should be rewritten to make a little more sense grammatically. Additionally, some language used in the article did not seem totally neutral.

I noticed a section on ASL within the Bilingualism subheading. Why was that the only sign language mentioned? Maybe it would be better if the article either included a little more depth on other signed languages especially within that subheading. I think it's important to remember that these articles are for the world, not just Americans,