User:Alanflz/James M. Jay/Depo808knee Peer Review

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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.) I am going off of the peer review changes I suggested in person and comparing it to what you guys have now. I had a suggestion about the fourth sentence of the "Early Life" section and you guys did a wonderful job making that sentence concise. I suggested you guys remove any mention of him in the military in the "Career" section because it was already mentioned in early life and you guys did that. I recognize a couple of AAAWUBBIS sentences too. In the Legacy section you guys discuss one of Jay's publications, if he has more publications than that one I suggest adding another section for publications. Overall, wonderful work!