User:Albkvz/John of Salisbury/Cobble2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Albkvz


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Albkvz/John_of_Salisbury?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

It seems like this article is off to a really good start! There is a good amount of information in the Medical Science and Philosophical Views sections! I see that you cut a lot of the opening paragraph, which looks like a good choice, but definitely try to fill it out some more. I'm guessing the notes section is personal notes, but there is a good amount of info here that should be added to some of the other sections, or even a new section. Overall I think the most needed thing your article needs is more sources, you have whole paragraphs based on a single source, but if you can find multiple sources that corroborate the information, that would help a lot. You present a very good neutral tone, especially with the views section, something that should be commended since it can be difficult to explain someone else's ideas without injecting your own.

Response to Peer Review (Gage)
Thank you for reviewing the article! I agree that I need to include more sources within the article. I am currently reading through a 100 page article to try and corroborate some of the information that I have already written down. It is surprisingly difficult to find solid information about a lesser know philosopher who lived around 900 years ago. I think that some sections can be filled out some more, but I believe those sections were in the process of being added to.

Response to Peer Review
I am not cutting anything out of the opening paragraph, I was just trying to eliminate confusion on what I wrote vs. what came from the original article. It's not an opening paragraph, it is from a pre-existing section.

I am still trying to find the best place for some of the information in my notes to be added to the rest of the article. Unfortunately, most of my sources do not talk about the same things so corroborating is not easy.