User:Ale936/Fifa 21/Otu.ak Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ale936


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Ale936/Fifa 21


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * FIFA 21

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Ale936,

I really enjoyed your addition to the FIFA 21 Wikipedia page. I feel that there are many components and features of games just like FIFA 21 that are never fully stated on Wikipedia. I am glad you took the time to address them.

I really like the way you explained both the “Pro Clubs” and “Kick Off” features. It is clear that you have spent time researching the subject (or playing the game) and you know what you're talking about. Your paragraphs are very informative and contain lots of detail. They are also easy for someone who is new to the FIFA game franchise to understand.

My only suggestion would be to check your grammar and punctuation. There are a couple of instances across both paragraphs that I feel there should be a comma. As well, there are some works that were in need of capitalization (i.e. Wikipedia). Make sure to double check your paragraphs for their punctuation.

Overall, I really liked your contribution and I believe anyone looking for information on FIFA 21 will find it very helpful.

Cheers,

Otu.ak