User:AleahHahn/Kuroshio Current/Jblockychop Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AleahHahn, BrightPe, JenniferBeau, Anoda022, Duncameg


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AleahHahn/Kuroshio_Current?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I like providing the different possible names. I would suggest adding a couple lines showing the impact of the Kuroshio current, why it will be impacted by climate change, etc to create a more engaging lead.

"

Deep Sea Erosion
The Kuroshio Current is an agent of deep sea erosion. This erosion has been seen offshore Southern Taiwan on the Kenting Plateau, and is likely caused by the strong bottom currents increasing in velocity along the Kenting Plateau. The bottom water accelerates as it travels from a depth of 3500m to a depth around 400-700m. This increase in speed exacerbates its eroding abilities. This erosion has revealed the Kuroshio Knoll, a 3km x 7km bean-shaped elevated flat area 60-70 m below surface levels in comparison to the rest of the Plateau which located at around 400-700m.

The Kenting Plateau and surrounding area demonstrate the eroding qualities of the Kuroshio Current. The particle size of the sand varies from the edge of the Plateau into the deep sea, with fine sand particles eroded away from the Plateau. Some of these fine sand particles have settled into a dune field while the remaining sediment is moved and deposited throughout the region by the Kuroshio Current. "

No citations here?

"

Biodiversity
Awareness of biodiversity becomes an important tool in determining the health of a region and can be an indicator for changes in the environment. The Kuroshio current is a biodiversity hotspot and one potentially at risk in the light of anthropogenic changes in the region as well as globally. The Kuroshio Current is unfortunately already a host to multiple species threatened due to overfishing and overharvesting. "

Kind of clunky writing here in my opinion.

I'm not sure it is made explicitly clear why the Kuroshio current is a biodiversity hotspot and what exactly that means.

"Marine mammals such as seals, sea lions and cetaceans also make use of the high biodiversity within the Kuroshio Current."

How?

"Caulerpa, a green algae that grows densely near shore on the periphery of the Kuroshio current. With brown and red algae even further inland yet the Kuroshio current no doubt influences their growth rates. There are ten more species of seaweed in the region."

Confusing sentences

I found the Climate Implications section to be well-written.