User:AleahHahn/Kuroshio Current/Tenshorts Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

AleahHahn


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:AleahHahn/Kuroshio_Current?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Section 0


 * Some funky formatting in the first paragraph after "North Pacific"
 * I might add "Current" after the bolded Kuroshio
 * Why was it named "for the deep blue of its waters" if it's also called the Black Current? Does Kuroshio mean deep blue?
 * "Powerful" is not quantitative; perhaps remove

Physical Properties


 * "the more significant... Kuroshio Current" - why is it more significant? Stronger velocty/flow? Bigger in volume of water transported?
 * In general I would avoid using "significant/ly" without quantifying it or relating it directly to the attribute in question. The word is used a number of times throughout this section
 * Add a space between numbers and units: "25 Sv"
 * Be consistent with spelling - "metres" vs "meters"
 * Why is reporting the path of the Kuroshio every day important? This feels a little out of place
 * Mention of the Tsushima Current should be earlier when discussing the Kuroshio's path
 * What "proxy" evidence? Give specifics since there are so many paleoceanographic proxies.
 * "This increase in speed exacerbates its eroding abilities." - feels redundant/disjointed

Biological Properties


 * Intro text about anthropogenic impacts on biodiversity feels like it belongs in the "Climate Implications" or "Marine Life" section, or should be mentioned later as it's own piece. Could potentially remove altogether
 * "The coastal areas are highly productive and the maximum chlorophyll value is found around 100 m depth" - what does the depth of this chlorophyll values you tell you about productivity? What is the maximum value?
 * Link to Coriolis effect
 * "Nutrients are stirred from dark layers..." - Is dark layers really a term used to describe the deep ocean? If so, it isn't clear in the text.

Marine Life


 * I believe "nutrient-rich" should be hyphenated, but check that.
 * "fish catches depend on oceanographic conditions" - Is fish catch a proxy for fish population? Previous sentence was focusing on population; these should connect.
 * "Thus, the fish intrusion affects presence, biomass, and catch of species such as pollock, sardine, and anchovy." - Is it fish intrusion that affects this, or water masses from different currents? How does this connect to the Oyashio Current?
 * "These top-tier trophic predators can serve as units in developing conservation management in this region." - what does "units" mean here?
 * "The warm sea surface temperature and low turbidity of these waters lead to clearer waters, allowing sunlight to penetrate deeper." - Does temperature play a role in light penetration?
 * "Studies confirming low genotypic diversity within the species further emphasizes this blue coral’s threatened status" - why does low genotypic diversity mean it's threatened?

Climate Implications


 * "Western boundary currents (WBC's) are integral parts of the world's climatic balance." - why are they integral? This big statement should be elaborated on or moved later when we understand why this is true.
 * I think it's usually "Pacific basin" (no capital basin), but check the literature to be sure.
 * I would mentioned that the Kuroshio Extension is another current (that's an extension of the Kuroshio), if that's true.
 * Should define bifurcation latitude as a new term
 * "These changes are principally thought to be a product of wind stress and surface warming, resulting in increased stratification in the water column." - The role of wind stress is discussed in the strengthening of the Kuroshio with climate change, but how does stratification fit in?

Kuroshio Current Intrusion


 * "The Kuroshio Current intrusion has a major influence on C. sinicus and E. concinna, which are two copepod species with higher index values for winter and originate from the East China Sea." - What's the major influence of the current? Water temperature? Nutrients?
 * When writing the Latin name for organisms, the first mention should always include the full name
 * "The Pearl River contains high levels of kaolinite and titanium (Ti)" - No love for kaolinite? Oof... Al₂Si₂O₅(OH)₄  :)

Overall, lots of great info and good sections—good work! There's a bit of overlap between some of them (biological and physical properties, biological and marine life, biological and climate implications), so I might think about how to combine sections or remove information. Ideally every claim should be cited. Focus on the flow of the article—try and disguise the fact that it's written by many people.